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Having a Squee moment
Nov. 19th, 2006 02:04 pmReaders of Julie E. Czerneda's newsgroup are familiar with a "squee" moment. It's went a plot or character point that's been bothering you is suddenly (and in a cool way) resolved. I just had one for my short story "Fun Until..." (discussed here).
My protagonist, Bill Hartmann, is a young man who decides to go a-pirating. Well, he's not as sympathetic as my readers would like. Also, his motivation for going pirating was kind of weak. So here's how I resolved both in a stroke. This is a conversation between Bill and his father Tom at their bar in Heinlein, Mars.
“Nobody ever asked me if I wanted to stay on Mars,” Bill said.
“She’s not the woman you think she is, son,” Tom said.
“It’s not about Mom,” Bill lied.
His dad walked away without saying a word.
So, my question is - do I need to be more specific that Bill's mom left them to go back to Earth, or does it work as written?
My protagonist, Bill Hartmann, is a young man who decides to go a-pirating. Well, he's not as sympathetic as my readers would like. Also, his motivation for going pirating was kind of weak. So here's how I resolved both in a stroke. This is a conversation between Bill and his father Tom at their bar in Heinlein, Mars.
“Nobody ever asked me if I wanted to stay on Mars,” Bill said.
“She’s not the woman you think she is, son,” Tom said.
“It’s not about Mom,” Bill lied.
His dad walked away without saying a word.
So, my question is - do I need to be more specific that Bill's mom left them to go back to Earth, or does it work as written?
