Evil Editor Strikes Again

There's a guy on the Internet that goes by the name "Evil Editor." He accepts author's query letters and critiques them. like mine.

It's actually quite helpful. The problem with writing is that you don't get a lot of useful feedback. An agent would take this query letter and send back a polite "doesn't suit our needs" and that's it.

So, now that I've got all this great feedback, I get to re-write the query.